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Need Help with this Business Letter for soliciting funds/ (Please provide constructive Crit.)?
January 1st, 2007 Teen Empowerment Outreach Center (TEOC) 123 Abin Road, Steet, Bucksville North Carolina, 23405 Office: 252.331.333.2233 Fax: 252.223.1515 Cornell.Robertson@yahoo.com John Harrison Incorporated TEOC is a non-profit Life Skills Service organization that provides a holistic and comprehensive approach to help at-risk teenagers obtain a high school diploma or a GED degree and enroll in a university or technical/vocational school program. In addition, TEOC services will include personal, cultural, and career development for teenagers in an environment that is safe, nurturing and supportive in a live-in campus style environment. TEOC’s comprehensive approach is threefold. We provide (CEC) Counseling, Education and Cultural Exposure. Please review our flyer for additional details about our program. TEOC is in the process of purchasing a 3 million dollar facility located on a 5 acre campus. We are seeking donations for donations for a down payment for our building fund. Thank you in advance for your consideration, as TEOC seeks to reduce the rate of teenage homelessness, crime and delinquency in the Greater Greenville, North Carolina area. Respectively Cornell Robertson, MAED Founder & Executive Director
Public Comments
- First of all, proofreading is a definite requirement. Double space when ending a sentence and starting another. The full address of the corporation should follow the name of the corporation. The person in the corporation to whom you are sending this letter should then follow the address. If name is not known then you could use 'To Whom It May Concern;. Although, if I were soliciting donations, I would do some research and know to whom I should address the letter. After the greeting, the person writing/sending letter should introduce himself/herself and the position he/she holds in the company/organization. As I said before, proofread..paragraph 4, does it really make proper sense? 'donation for' used twice, etc. Most of the last paragraph should be included with the second paragraph. Thank you for your consideration...should also include what you want them to consider; such as; Thank you for your consideration in donating to assist in this needed and worthy cause. The thank you should be the last statement of the letter. I see no punctuation after the closing, 'Respectively,'. I believe it should actually be 'Respectfully,'. Printed signature should be followed by handwritten signature. Be sure the MAED is understood by the reader. Then I would end with; TEOC, Founder and Director Hope this helps. I believe I have these guidelines correct. If this is a letter that is truly being sent out or you are considering writing this type of letter, please get a business-letter writing guide book. I'm sure your public library would have one you can borrow.
