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Can you please help with my resume. 10 points for your help. Thank you?

OBJECTIVE A position of responsibility and growth potential in Human Resource Management EDUCATION Master of Public Administration Graduation: May 2008 (Human Resources Management) Bowie State University, Bowie, MD G.P.A. 3.71/4.0 (Received 100% tuition reimbursement) Bachelor of Arts in Political Science Graduation: May 2006 Edinboro University, Edinboro, PA G.P.A. 3.21/4.0 (Completed 4-year program in 3 years) WORK EXPERIENCE Graduate Assistant August 2006-Present Department of Management, Marketing, and Public Administration Bowie State University, Bowie, MD •Managing career/ internship/scholarship/ conferences opportunities •Managing graduate students’ official files and documents •Advising undergraduate students •Conducting research for MBA program coordinator •Developing and updating department website •Broadcasting information and scheduling courses on the university databases •Developing and updating the department catalog •Assisting the long-term projects with the department Part-time Worker August 2004-Present Edinboro University and Bowie State University Campus, Sodexho USA •Providing quality customer service to faculty, staffs, students, and communities •Providing quality catering, concession, and dining services Intern May-August, 2005 The Royal Thai Embassy, Washington, D.C. •Assisted the Minister/Deputy Chief of Mission (International Relations) •Verified official documents (passport, visa, naturalization, and legalization) PROFESSIONAL DEVELOPMENT TRAINING •Member of Society for Human Resource Management 2007-2008 •Website Development Training September, 2007 •OSDBU Procurement Conference April, 2007 •Faculty Research and Scholarship Training Series March, 2007 •Goodwill Industries of the Chesapeake June, 2006 SKILLS Microsoft Office Applications (Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Outlook) PeopleSoft8 Lotus Notes Research (Collecting, Managing, and Analyzing data) Communication Skills (English and Thai) AWARDS Graduate Assistantship 2006-2008 SILVER Award 2005-2006 Julie Lieber International Scholarship 2004-2005 ASSE International Exchange Program Scholarship, United States, 2002-2003 Help with the grammar errors/ wordings/ formats. Thank you.

Public Comments

1. - I would remove "(Received 100% tuition reimbursement) ". I think it unnecessary. - Your first to bullets both start with "managing". Maybe you should try a thesaurus and come up with some different descriptive words. You have some other duplicates too. Really try to make those descriptive words pop. - You'll want to put your most impressive bullets first. - "•Assisting the long-term projects with the department " that phrase doesn't make sense. - under your training, I wouldn't put a comma after the month. (ie. June 2006, not June, 2006) - What's the SILVER Award for?
2. Go to a resume writing site and learn. I agree with bar two. Plus add a personal page. You need to add warm of your personality. It is a big part of the hiring process. You should know that being in HR. Revamp the resume and post it again. Be ready to revamp it a few times before submitting it.