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what can be a good title for this essay? any suggestions on what else i can add to make it longer?

A pediatrician is a doctor who specializes in the care and development of children and in the prevention and treatment of children’s diseases. They work to reduce infant and child mortality, control infectious diseases, foster healthy lifestyles, and ease the day-to-day difficulties of children and adolescents with chronic conditions. Pediatricians take care of kids, from birth to 21 years of age. Last week, I had the pleasure to interview my co-workers sister, Melissa Martinez. Dr. Martinez is a pediatrician at El Paso Pediatric center. My interview took place at an Italian restaurant called Olive Garden. I was excited to have the opportunity to find out what a pediatrician is all about. The morning sun warmed out that Saturday. It was around two p.m. when I arrived to the restaurant. I entered the front doors and to my right I immediately spotted Dr.Martinez, a thin, tall, in her mid-forties lady, sitting in a corner table enjoying a cup of coffee. I walked over to the table and she promptly stood up and greeted me with a firm handshake. The restaurant had a delicious, appetizing aroma. As we were anticipating for our warm meals, I asked Dr. Martinez what she enjoyed about being a pediatrician. She proudly said, “I enjoy everything about my job, and I think that most people who choose a career in pediatrics feel the same way.” I then asked her what were some things that she does not like about being a pediatrician. She started describing a few things she did not enjoy. “ I don’t like to see kids crying and being in pain, but unfortunately, I’ve had to learn how to deal with that,” Dr. Martinez said. She also said that working with insurance companies can get difficult at times. After a few minutes, our waitress brought our food. The food looked mouth-watering and ready to be eaten. Enjoying our food, Dr. Martinez started explaining what influenced her in becoming a pediatrician. She said she always wanted to be a doctor since she was a little kid. During her third year of attending medical school, she started working with patients such as delivering babies, internal medicine, family practice and pediatrics. “I enjoyed pediatrics and taking care of children the most,” she said staring directly into my eyes. I told her that ever sine I was a little kid, my affection for kids had always been enormous also. I then asked her how much does pediatricians make. She said that pediatricians make less than $60,000 up to $400,000 a year. Her professionalism, courtesy, and understanding were helping me understand the pediatric field a little better. Wiping some spaghetti sauce from my lips, I asked Dr. Martinez what was the future for pediatrics. “Pediatrics has a strong future,” Dr. Martinez said with a very confident look, ‘’as long as people keep having babies there will always be a need for pediatricians.” As I asked what a typical day for a pediatrician was, she started explaining her day from beginning to end. “ Well, my day usually begins by going to the hospital to visit any new babies or sick children that have been hospitalized,” she began. “Next, office hours usually begin at 9:00 and continue until 5:00 p.m. with an hour of lunch in between,” she said. Dr. Martinez explained that during office hours, pediatricians see kids who are sick, for example ear infections or stomachaches, as well as well child appointments, such as when kids go for their checkups and shots. Finishing up our meals Dr. Martinez said, “There may be bad days when you get tired of what you are doing, but in general, I love my job.” Pediatrics is not just stomach infections and crying babies like I thought, it is actually a very challenging field. Melissa Martinez gave me a great insight on the pediatric field, giving me more motivation to pursue my goal in pediatrics. Someday I am going to be able to look back at this interview as a valuable learning experience.

Public Comments

1. Damn....huh...."My Day"
2. Pediatricians, Cool or What?
3. Miracle Doctor.
4. " the pediatrician"
5. where you say "my coworkers sister Melissa" you should say "my co-worker's sister Melissa" Tittle: What is a pediatrician?
6. Title: Serious Questions and Spaghetti To lengthen this essay, I have a few suggestions. One would be to look at any place you use an adverb (usually words ending in "ly" like "proudly"). You can usually replace these words with a longer description. For example, instead of "she promptyl stood up..." you could write a little more of a physical description, show the reader instead of telling. Further, we could use more physical description of the doctor. Finally, I think we have a good dialogue between you and the doctor, and enough description of the scene, but I think we could use a little more text that tells what's going on in your head throughout all of this. Describe what you felt and what you were thinking when she told you about the good and bad aspects of her job.
7. your opening paragraph leaves the reader questioning about why did you add all the extra stuff about what diseases do they treat and prevent, what are the day to day difficulties. if you want to leave it how it is, i would take out the whole first paragragraph, and redo it on where Dr. Martinez works, moreon her, and why she became a pedi DR. other wise youre kinda left wondering where the other information you talked about in the beginning is. But, if you say add a paragraph on each of those topics, it would show more on her job, what she deals with, and she helps prevent them, and it would make your paper significantly longer. the rest was excellent, but the first paragraph definitely clashes with the rest of your paper, and leaves you hanging in the end. then you could call the paper, A Day in the Life of DR. Martinez